At the same time, unless it is a personal narrative, avoid personal pronouns like I, My, or Me.
Try instead to be more general and you will have your reader hooked.
The thesis should be a clear, one-sentence explanation of your position that leaves no doubt in the reader’s mind about which side you are on from the beginning of your essay.
Following the thesis, you should provide a mini-outline which previews the examples you will use to support your thesis in the rest of the essay.
They probably had good grades, popular, never in trouble, no health issues and socially and emotionally stable.
However, twenty years later, after graduating college, a successful business owner, had a beautiful wife and three kids, he decides emotionally he is done and takes his own life.
In this way we can see that the basic introduction does not need to be much more than three or four sentences in length.
If yours is much longer you might want to consider editing it down a bit!
However, it has to be assumed that the administration doesn’t have all the specific knowledge about mental health.
As stated in the Educational Leadership Policy Standards: “An education leader promotes the success of every student by ensuring management of the organization, operation, and resources for a safe, efficient, and effective learning environment (“NPBEA,” 2007).